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crashofthunder
crashofthunder
07 January 2009 @ 09:36 pm
Run! They Are Zombie Birds! They Are Hungry!  
Oh God, Oh God
There's something cawing outside --
something with a taste for blood,
Huginn and Muginn with rotted beak
and crumbling sense of wherewithal.
Will they leave me be?
I have an axe, I have an axe...

They'd be fools to come inside,
beating wings shedding ebon feathers
just to get at my delicious brainjuice.
I know I'm smart! I've got an axe!
The birds and ravens, crows and magpies
are a living blanket covering the earth,
and they are dead.

They have no fear, no fear of fire
Not like living birds, you know --
living birds crave the flesh, but it's...
worms, not people. Cinderella's stepmother
would disagree, but

FUCK!

Back off! Get back, you damn --

I HOLD YOU HERE!
I AM ODIN, GOD OF THE GALLOWS!
WITH THIS AXE I SEND YOU BACK TO DUST!
You will not pass this barrier unmolested!
Fucking goddamn birds! They want to eat me!
This is ridiculous.
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sareth[info]sareth on January 8th, 2009 05:57 am (UTC)
Heeheehee! Awesome.
Craig S.[info]cernunnos on January 8th, 2009 06:05 am (UTC)
This is especially kickass because I'm reading American Gods right now.
Kit-chan[info]chiave_trust on January 8th, 2009 07:32 am (UTC)
The 'brainjuice' bit tripped me up, because otherwise there's an interesting contrast between the mythological and epic (Odin, Huginn and Muginn) and the 'fucking goddamn birds, they want to eat me' senses.
crashofthunder[info]crashofthunder on January 8th, 2009 07:33 am (UTC)
I was going for a guy that has kind of lost it a little. I mean, zombie birds are scary things. you know how when some people take drugs they see themselves as "epic"? That was the target feeling -- dramatic and powerful, but also scared, but also crazy. that's why there's more repetition than usual as well, to enhance the sense that the narrator's lost it a little.
draklyne[info]draklyne on January 8th, 2009 07:44 am (UTC)
Indeed
Very amusing - the off-kilter meter and the surreal ridiculousness of the situation make the last sentence very ambiguous in meaning, with multiple entendres. I appreciate it, anyway.

What level of criticism are you comfortable with? Also, know that I do not consider myself particularly poetically apt. I can say a bunch of stuff about it, like how it's ironic that he calls on God (1), and then ends up being Odin (23) himself. Or how the last line could be read as the character or yourself, and how, as a result, the entirety of the poem hinges on that sentence - either as the rantings of a madman or one besieged by killer birds or as the author yourself. Like a thumbtack piercing several layers of paper, that's what I mean by "hinges."
Kimura Aiko[info]instigator_ash on January 8th, 2009 03:23 pm (UTC)
"This gives me a great new idea! Winged zombies!" --Xykon
Jay Random[info]meta4mix on January 12th, 2009 10:23 pm (UTC)
Lol! Rock on, my zombie brethren. (Hi! Was linked here by chiave_trust.)
crashofthunder[info]crashofthunder on January 12th, 2009 11:01 pm (UTC)
I friended you, so you can look at the (few) locked entries I've got as well.

Hope you enjoy^^;
 
 

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